8th SpringBoard Embedded Assessment 1.1
Definition Essay on Heroism
Name:_________________________________ Period: _________
CATEGORY
Introduction
Paragraph
+ _______
10
Ideas- Body
Paragraph:
Function
+_____
20
Ideas – Body
Paragraph:
Example
+_____
20
Ideas – Body
Paragraph:
Negation
+_____
20
Conclusion
Paragraph:
+_____
10
Word Choice
+_____
10
Advanced
4
Proficient
3
Basic
2
Partial/Attempt
1
Introduction contains an
engaging HOOK, effective
background knowledge,
and a THESIS statement
that contains all 3 major
ideas defining HEROES.
Introduction contains
some type of HOOK,
background knowledge,
and a THESIS statement
that contains 3 majors.
Introduction has partial
completion of HOOK,
background
knowledge. Thesis
statement may be
limited or unclear.
Introduction is missing
essential components
of HOOK, background,
and/or thesis OR is
incomplete.
FUNCTION of heroism in
real life is explained with
2 traits and commentary
for each.
A variety of relevant detail
& commentary convincingly
develops the writer’s traits
of a HERO.
(What are 3 traits of a
HERO?)
FUNCTION of heroism in
real life is explained with
1 trait and commentary
for each.
Details & commentary
develops the writer’s traits
of a HERO.
(What are 3 traits of a
HERO?)
The concept of
FUNCTION of heroism
in real life is basically
defined using 1-2 traits.
Details are present in
essay, but may lack
understanding of the
concept of FUNCTION.
The function of heroism
is minimally defined.
Lacks relevant details
to support writer’s
ideas of function.
EXAMPLES of
2 specific heroes are
described with support,
detail and commentary.
Relevant details from text
(quotes), personal
experience, and/or
historical or current events
are used to DESCRIBE
each of your 3 heroes.
EXAMPLES of
1 specific heroe is
described with support
and commentary. Details
from text (quotes),
personal experience,
and/or historical or current
events are used to
DESCRIBE the 2 heroes.
Real-life EXAMPLES
are evident in the
essay. Evidence to
support may be
present but is limited
and/or does not
adequately DESCRIBE
the hero(es).
Examples of heroes
may be inappropriate,
insufficient, or
confusing. Lacks
relevant details to
support examples or
ideas.
NEGATION strategy
explains what a hero is
NOT. 2 examples that are
opposite of a hero are
explained and EACH
example is elaborated with
detail, support, and/or
commentary.
NEGATION strategy
explains what a hero is
NOT. 1 examples that
are opposite of a hero are
explained and EACH
example is elaborated
with detail, support, and/or
commentary.
NEGATION strategy
explains what a hero is
NOT. Evidence to
support may be
present but is limited,
or does not adequately
explain.
Conclusion is concise,
powerful, and reflective.
Conclusion clearly
connects thesis and
support with insightful
comments and analysis.
Ending gives the reader
something to think about.
Essay ends in a thoughtful Essay ends with
conclusion. Ideas in the
minimal connection to
conclusion adequately
thesis and support
connect thesis and
support, wrapping up the
writing.
Author’s word choice
enhances the style of the
text. The author skillfully
embeds sophisticated
vocabulary, including
words from the word wall in
context of the essay.
Word choice is
appropriate and author
correctly embeds words
from the word wall in the
context of the essay.
Function strategy
paragraph is missing.
Example strategy
paragraph is missing.
Negation paragraph
does explain what a
hero is NOT or
explanation is
inappropriate or
insufficient.
Negation strategy
paragraph is missing.
Conclusion does not
wrap up the writing or
is missing.
Word choice is
Word choice is
appropriate but may
inappropriate for an
not include words from academic essay.
the word wall in context
of the essay.
Writing
Process
+_____
10
Conventions
+_____
10
Extensive evidence that
essay reflects stages of the
writing process including
revisions to improve text in
rough draft, student proof,
and final draft.
Some evidence that essay
reflects stages of the
writing process…. in
rough draft, student proof,
and final draft.
Little evidence that
No prewrite, rough
essay has undergone draft, revisions or
stages of the writing
editing.
process.
Some part of the
process is not finished.
There are few errors in
spelling, grammar,
capitalization, and
punctuation; quotes are
accurately embedded in
text.
There are minor errors in
grammar, spelling,
capitalization or
punctuation; quotes are
embedded in text.
There are several
errors in grammar,
spelling, or
punctuation, and
capitalization; the
essay does not appear
to have been carefully
edited.
Total_____/ 110
Grade_____
Comments:
Strengths:
Areas to Improve:
Essay lacks any clear
editing or proofing, as it
has significant errors in
grammar, spelling,
capitalization or
punctuation.